He had twenty lovers (incarnations of Arthur do not count) over the years. This line doesn't make sense to me when you say a short while later that there are only four lovers. I assume that the remaining 16 were incarnations of Arthur, but maybe you could rephrase this to make that more obvious.
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Date: 2009-12-09 02:32 am (UTC)This line doesn't make sense to me when you say a short while later that there are only four lovers. I assume that the remaining 16 were incarnations of Arthur, but maybe you could rephrase this to make that more obvious.